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    Liberty Dies In Tragic Reentry Failure [HASSESA]

    RIP Albert Falcon Jr. You were my favorite technician on many missions. Space will not be the same without you.

    I'm assuming the investigators at NASA/HASSESSA/NTSB have also considered the possibility that a software malfunction could have resulted in an inadvertent activation of Cmdr. Calhoun's ejection seat, and that this in fact could have been the hull breach that caused the ship to break apart. Since the Captain's chair in the DGIV is ejected separately from the rest of the crew, this is certainly a possibility. I think this along with several other recent mishaps should be enough for a complete worldwide grounding of all DGIV fleets until a thorough technical review is made of each and every system, nut, bolt, wire, rivet, and screw.
    Posted 11-24-2014 at 06:50 PM by n122vu n122vu is offline
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    Liberty Dies In Tragic Reentry Failure [HASSESA]

    I think the choice of language is fine; routine, planned, scheduled, non-emergency, standard flight according to plans. Spaceflight will hopefully one day become as routine as air travel, perhaps - no reason to think otherwise, as colonies become a thing.

    Careful examination of the RCS and computers of your remaining craft is now in order, HASSEA, before you fly again.
    Posted 11-16-2014 at 03:49 PM by Xyon Xyon is offline
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    Posted 11-06-2014 at 07:59 PM by Samuel Edwards Samuel Edwards is offline
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    Liberty Dies In Tragic Reentry Failure [HASSESA]

    Spaceflight will NEVER be routine, in real-life and virtual.
    Posted 11-06-2014 at 07:32 PM by IronRain IronRain is online now
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    Bristol -- Chapter 1

    You actually have anywhere from 1 to 3 spaces after a sentence. If it is intentional, it doesn't come across that way to the read and looks like poor formatting. It's kinda like the dreaded "..." which gets overused a bunch in some writing, if you do it a bunch, or in places it doesn't really fit, it looks off. Same goes for spacing between paragraphs. Some are like 3 lines apart, which I understand for reading a letter, etc. But a couple felt like they weren't needed, as if I was supposed to encounter a separate thought or something, but then didn't, and that really stuck out.

    In regards to the story itself, which I just got the chance to actually read, I found a lot of it really difficult to get through, I kept wanting to skip over most of it. The whole sneaking past the bedroom scene felt forced. There wasn't any reason given why she had to be so sneaky, so I guess it is how most school mornings go for her, in which case it probably shouldn't be included with such detail. Most of the chapter was her morning routine actually, which generally wasn't anything different than your average morning routine, so you can assume your readers already know what it is like. As I said, I had trouble not wanting to skip parts, as I found myself glancing ahead to where something unique was happening. There really wasn't much content to the chapter, I think, not even much in the way of introducing the characters. Could probably start reading from chapter two without missing much besides the names of characters.

    Three small things that stuck out, too:

    - I am going to go out on a limb and say you are under 21, as no one who has experienced being 21 would ever write "A 21 year old like her should be bursting with energy-and…waking up before 6AM"
    - The last sentence is really cliche. Super cliche. I get that it was lighthearted or whatever, but oh boy did it leave a bad taste in my mouth.
    -"a trip downstairs completed her mission accomplished." redundant typo.

    tl;dr: Consistent formatting, less high school sitcom, more interesting content. Keep at it of course, but I didn't see any critiques, so I had to bring it up.
    Posted 01-21-2014 at 09:29 AM by Pablo49 Pablo49 is offline
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    Bristol -- Chapter 1

    You mean like in some places there are triple spaces rather than double spaces? I think I remember doing that intentionally, but I may have done it too much.
    Posted 01-21-2014 at 02:52 AM by Samuel Edwards Samuel Edwards is offline
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    Bristol -- Chapter 1

    You have inconsistent spacing at the end of sentences.
    Posted 01-21-2014 at 12:36 AM by Pablo49 Pablo49 is offline
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    HASSESA VSA Update 08/08/13

    The astronauts did make it to Ascension safe and sound. They're still establishing residence in their quarters in building 025.

    The storms have started as of yesterday. Gonna be a fun month for the people here at the island.

    {Eliza Delacroix -- secretary -- Jamison Alexander.}
    Posted 08-12-2013 at 07:14 PM by Samuel Edwards Samuel Edwards is offline
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    Posted 08-07-2013 at 02:41 PM by Samuel Edwards Samuel Edwards is offline
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    HASSESA VSA Update 07/31/13

    Quote:
    Originally Posted by PhantomCruiser View Comment
    And the Russian guys don't frown at us as much as the NASA guys do when we drag race golf carts down the taxiway.
    I could make the golf carts a reality
    Posted 08-07-2013 at 02:35 PM by ky ky is offline
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    HASSESA VSA Update 07/31/13

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    And the Russian guys don't frown at us as much as the NASA guys do when we drag race golf carts down the taxiway.
    You know, I always wondered what our Russian crew did in their free time. Might have to go send over a few of our staff after hours. By any chance are you looking to sell any golf carts?
    Posted 08-07-2013 at 01:57 PM by Samuel Edwards Samuel Edwards is offline
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    HASSESA VSA Update 07/31/13

    Phantom Mfg is U.S. based too, but we affiliate with multiple governments and space agencies. Kirby bought an AN-225 and has planted enough seed money to restart the MAKS program. NASA and the U.S. gov want things "their" way, so we might hitch a ride or lease their craft, but they've got to bid like everyone else (and the Russian team beat the bid).

    And the Russian guys don't frown at us as much as the NASA guys do when we drag race golf carts down the taxiway.
    Posted 08-07-2013 at 06:51 AM by PhantomCruiser PhantomCruiser is offline
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    HASSESA VSA Update 07/31/13

    I appreciate the offer, mate. But HASSESA is not in your timeline meaning the TX does not exist. So I couldn't choose you.
    Posted 08-06-2013 at 10:52 PM by Samuel Edwards Samuel Edwards is offline
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    HASSESA VSA Update 07/31/13

    Should have paid ISA. We've got a shiny TX craft and could have taken that contract on for you. ah well......
    Posted 08-06-2013 at 10:43 PM by garyw garyw is offline
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    HASSESA VSA Update 07/31/13

    Absolutely nothing. I just would rather affiliate with NASA over Russia because HASSESA is a United States based space company. All different kinds of astronauts and crew from all other agencies are, of course, welcome to join.
    Posted 08-06-2013 at 10:00 PM by Samuel Edwards Samuel Edwards is offline
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    HASSESA VSA Update 07/31/13

    What's wrong with a Russian aircraft?
    Posted 08-06-2013 at 07:36 PM by Scav Scav is offline
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    HASSESA VSA Update 07/31/13

    We actually already decided that we were gonna pay NASA to fly the DGIV over to Ascension (you got me before my next blogpost).

    Not all operations are closing down. Most of the crew will be remaining on island to work in maintenance and engineering. Hardly any crew will be doing nothing. The astronauts themselves are going to be busy training the new crew members.
    Posted 08-06-2013 at 01:11 PM by Samuel Edwards Samuel Edwards is offline
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    HASSESA VSA Update 07/31/13

    It wouldn't be that expensive (ISA offer great rates!) and shutting down your operations due to weather is not good either. You'll be paying all those staff to sit around and play cards.
    Posted 08-06-2013 at 08:46 AM by garyw garyw is offline
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    HASSESA VSA Update 07/31/13

    The whole point is to not bring it back until the weather has cleared. The reason we are gonna leave it at the ISS is to give the crew another way to escape in emergency.

    There has been consideration of packing it on a ship once before, but we'd rather not.

    I'd rather use the SCA than an AN-225.

    Dealing with boats is not something we'd like to do. It's an expense we're not willing to take to move a spacecraft.
    Posted 08-04-2013 at 05:48 PM by Samuel Edwards Samuel Edwards is offline
    Updated 08-04-2013 at 05:53 PM by Samuel Edwards
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    HASSESA VSA Update 07/31/13

    Attach it to an AN-225 and fly it piggy-back?
    Posted 08-02-2013 at 10:22 PM by PhantomCruiser PhantomCruiser is offline

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