A draft of me book

[ryan]

I am quiet a good writer, i have wrote plenty books for me local libary and school.
And heres one about space. Be aware it is still a draft so dont judge to much.

Our steps into the outreaches
Draft



Prologue:

December 14th 1972, mans last steps on the surface on the moon, while astronaut Eugene Cernan says his final words on the surface, marks of mankinds dream on walking on the moon, in the space of only 11 years NASA had sent 34 men in 27 missions into the outer reaches of space. Cernan set a new challenge for the young people back on earth to return to the moon, we are yet to fulfill Cernans pledge. The Mercury and Gemini programs both all led up to this moment in history, in the July of 1969 man first set foot on the moon, now in 1972 man is leaving for the final time. We will explore the events leading up to the moon landings and beyond. This is the story of the men who first looked upon earth from space, who flew on the shoulders of giants beyond earths influence and into an alien world. To the tight Mercury bell shape capsule to the great space stations of today, we look at how it’s changed after triumphs and loses.

Hot to cold
Chapter 1

Nazi Germany had long held secrets, the creation of rockets. The V2 rocket launched from deep inside Nazi-Germany to bomb the allied cities of world war two. 1945, Werhner Von Braun the genius behind the V2 rocket was fleeing from the fast advancing Soviet Russian Armies, he knew if he at least surrendered to the American forces he might have a chance of his V2 to be never used a bomb again but used for something more. On May 2nd 1945 Von Braun surrendered to a US army private of the 44th infantry division, he was put into questioning were he openingley said that he was the German rocketeer who created the V2 rocket. Von Braun identity was at the up-most secrecy, he worked with the National Advisory Committee for Aeronautics the predecessor for the National Aeronautics and Space Administration or NASA. Tensions between the two world super powers the Soviet Union and the United States of America built up the race into space. Von Braun was put under more pressure to send at least something into space, until one early morning NASA administration learns about of the first man-made object to reach orbit, Soviet built Sputnik 1, the bleep of the orbiting satellite sent chills down all of the nations spine. The R-7 rocket sent the small satellite into Low Earth Orbit or LEO. It had 4 fall-away boosters to lift and 2 more stages to lift it into orbit. The US had to respond the only way they knew how, beating it. The Vanguard TV3 satellite was the first attempt to put something into space. Only 2 seconds into launch the vanguard rocket exploded from the bottom- up. This failure embarrasses the American space community and the public of the USA. It wasn’t until 1958 that NASA successfully launched their first satellite into orbit, Explorer 1. On orbit it was to find the Van Allen belt, a ring of radiation surrounding earth. If NASA were to send humans into space they will need to overcome this deadly belt of radiation.

 

[TSPenguin]

I enjoyed reading this. It is very well written and your writing style appeals to me. Besides that I think this text is suitable for all ages. Hell, If I had them, I'd give this to my children.

As this is a draft, I hope you don't mind me saying that you should include the year sputnik was launched, especialy if you use this sentence later on:

It wasn’t until 1958 that NASA successfully launched their first satellite into orbit, Explorer 1.

Very well done!

P.S.: Have you thought about making your other work public?

 

[Apollo 11]

An enjoyable read. VERY well done:thumbup:

 

[ar81]

Nice narrator skills. You are very talented.

 

[ryan]

I enjoyed reading this. It is very well written and your writing style appeals to me. Besides that I think this text is suitable for all ages. Hell, If I had them, I'd give this to my children.

As this is a draft, I hope you don't mind me saying that you should include the year sputnik was launched, especialy if you use this sentence later on:


Very well done!

P.S.: Have you thought about making your other work public?

Well i want to concentrate more on the US space program, but i might add things about the Russian. Maybe even a ''In Soviet Russia the....'' joke.

 

[ryan]

A little continueation on chaper 1, i especially like the title on chaper 4 ''The crack in the bell''
If NASA were to send humans into space they will need to overcome this deadly belt of radiation. Launch of giant rockets shot out of earth’s atmosphere, all going up there for one main reason beating the other side. A new word was invented ‘Astronaut’ and ‘Cosmonaut’ these were given to new test pilots wanting to take part in the space program. The best of all test pilots from both Russia and USA. The Mercury seven was America’s choice for Astronauts. Alan. B Shepard, Virgil I. Grissom, Donald K. Slayton, Walter M. Schirra, L. Gordon Cooper Jr, M. Scott Carpenter and John H. Glenn Jr. All have piloting experience either in the United States Navy, Air Force or Marine Corp. The seven would work very closely in development of the Mercury capsule and the make over of the Redstone and Atlas missiles. They would later become the most thoroughly trained astronauts NASA has ever produced. All seven men hoped to be the first person in space, until one day in 1961 yet again NASA was told news of terrible news over the iron curtain of the Soviet Union, they had put a man in space. Yuri Gagarin did one orbit in the small Russian Vostok capsule, landing safely deep inside the Soviet borders. The Russians have taken the so-called space race to higher levels.

Chapter two
A 15-minute flight.

The mercury astronauts were now racing to second, after the flight of Vostok 1, yet again the American public to react, by putting something in space, in form of a man. On January 31st MR-2 launched from Cape Canaveral, carrying one primate, Ham the chimp rode in the capsule, after the sub-orbital flight engineers knew that the mercury capsule can survive in space, NASA was now ready to put Alan Shepard into space.
The morning of may 5th astronaut Alan Shepard suited up in his pressure suit; he later entered the capsule awaiting the single booster under the redstone rocket. Hold of the countdown were common, Al Shepard was some-what known for his temper, well that showed, Shepard was getting tired of sitting on his back, when he directly told Mercury Control Center or MCC to release the hold on the count and light this candle, and they did. The booster ignited and lifted the capsule into the air. Thousands of people at the cape witnessed the launch, and millions worldwide watched it live on TV. The manual start clock was started ‘Roger, liftoff and the clock has started!’ called out Shepard. He would feel only 4 minutes of zero-g or weightlessness, until he fired the two retro jets and fell back to the earth, landing near the awaiting navy recovery forces, which will recover him and the Freedom 7 capsule. 15 minutes of pure glory, the public reacted to this mission with great excitement, but it still wasn’t enough, the Russians orbited earth, Freedom 7 was only sub-orbital, America is yet to orbit the earth with a manned capsule. Changes must be done before man can orbit in a mercury capsule, freedom 7 did not fully test out the control systems of the capsule, and many more systems and sub-systems that yet need to be tested in space.

Chapter three
‘ We choose to go to the moon.’
Only fifteen days after the flight of Alan Shepard freedom 7 flights, the young President John F. Kennedy said this speech to congress.
‘ First, I believe that this nation should commit itself to achieving the goal, before this decade is out, of landing a man on the Moon and returning him back safely to the earth. No single space project in this period will be more impressive to mankind, or more important for the long-range exploration of space; and none will be so difficult or expensive to accomplish.’
Kennedy was setting a challenge to NASA, wether he did it because he was a dreamer and a visionary or politcally a-stu, he set the greatest challenge man will ever take in that period of time. The NASA administrators and astronauts listened in on any radio that they could find, going to the moon will be a great challenge to them and they knew it would be very diffcult to accomplish, like the Presdient said in his speech. NASA immedentley set out planning for this new lunar mission, many film-makers, authors and sceinetists dreamed of going to the moon, but this time man was trueley going to our nearest neighbour in the cosmos.

Chapter four
The crack in the bell.
Virgil I. Grissom better known as Gus would fly the next mercury redstone flight, MR-4. Gus was the engineer of the Mercury seven so naturally he was given the mission that really got into the engineering aspect of space flight. Many changes were added into the spacecraft, a larger forward window, and especially an explosive hatch, that will blow the hatch from its hinges so the astronaut could quickly escape the capsule in case of emergency. Grissom would launch on July 21st 1961. The launch and flight went perfectly, Grissom manually controlled the craft from booster separation to re-entry a fundamental aspect if they were to orbit. The Liberty Bell 7 had a painted crack on it, to symbolize the Liberty Bell cracking and the Mercury capsule looking like a bell. It wasn’t until recovery operations until things got serious. While Grissom was awaiting pick up from the recovery helicopter, without warning the hatch blew apart, rushing water flooded the craft, but Grissom was still strapped into his seat. The months of emergency egress training were now to pay-off for Grissom, he rushed out of his flooding capsule, and he floated in the water for 20 or so minutes until the helicopter came, the helicopter pilot at first seemed more concentrated on recovering the capsule itself not Grissom. Later on, the recovery ship sent out a second helicopter to recover Grissom, but they had to drop the capsule, it laid under more water than the titanic, but it has been recently been salvaged and on display at the Kennedy Space Center.

Chapter five
Glenn in orbit

Astronaut John H. Glenn was to be the first American person to orbit the earth. He would ride the Atlas ballistic missile, he would ride the mercury capsule code-named Friendship 7, symbolizing that he goes in space in peace. Almost one year after the flight of the Russian Vostok 1, the mercury atlas rocket sat on it’s luanchpad awaiting the arrival of its precious cargo of one man. The afternoon of February 20th 1962 friendship 7 was launched into earth orbit, being tracked by many tracking station around the world, sending information and communication to the Mercury Control Center back in Cape Canaveral. Friendship 7 was originally planned for at least seven orbits of the earth, but that was not done because of issues with the retro rockets made to bring the capsule down from orbital speed and back to earth. It was in the middle of the flight when the mission controllers back at the Cape discovered that the heat shield may be loose and the only things keeping them together was the retro straps made to hold the retro package down before it is released. If the heat shield were to be damaged the capsule will burn up in the earth’s atmosphere loosing its crew. The only way the mission controllers thought the heat shield could hold is if they leave the retro package on during re-entry and when it’s burnt up the pressure of re-entry will just keep the shield on. The Lose Of Signal or LOS during re-entry was critical, the gases around the space craft built up blocking any communication signals from the ground, the world would not know if John Glenn survived until the communication was gained yet again. Glenn would experience 7.7 Gs during the fiery re-entry. About 5 minutes later the signal was acquired again, Glenn and friendship 7 was safe, the retro packaged burnt of during re-entry just was it anticipated, he later splashdown close to the naval recovery forces. Glenn did 3 orbits around the earth, doing experiments on himself and the spacecraft. The Americans were back in the running for winning the space race.

Chapter six
Low of heart and low of fuel.
The next Mercury atlas orbital mission was planned to be Delta 7, piloted by Donald K. Slayton or better known as Deke. During centrifuge training, a machine that spun around to train astronauts when it cam to G-forces. His jumpy heart rate later showed the Slayton had a heart condition called Arterial fibrillation, it basically squeezed one of the hearts arteries blocking blood flow into the heart. This condition stopped from flying any aircraft, especially his mission Delta 7. He was taken off the Mercury flight plan and put into the position of Director of Flight Crew Operations, which basically took care of anything that had to do with the astronauts during pre-flight and position on flight rotation, but he still was very highly respected by all astronauts. The cancellation Delta 7 brought upon a new mission, Aurora 7 or Mercury-Atlas 7. Yet again it was planned for three orbits around the earth, the astronaut piloting the mission was to be Astronaut M. Scott Carpenter, the first scientist- astronaut. In orbit Carpenter was taking to many pictures of the earth, he was maneuvering the capsule so he could get a better look at any position of the earth, this resulted in low fuel, he quickly ran out of manual fuel and almost out of automatic fuel. The first NASA crisis in space. He had to move the spacecraft to retro firing position with only limited bursts of thrust from the fuel. Thankfully he landed at the recovery zone, with all his pictures of the earth.