myles
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So I'm applying to go to pharmacy school at Ohio Northern University. They're pretty selective. My application is decent, but I want the essay to really knock it out of the park! Here is what I have so far:
The prompt is "Based on what you have learned about ONU, why have you chosen to apply? What do you believe you will contribute to the ONU community academically, personally, and/or in terms of diversity?
They gave me 5 lines, so they don't want a whole lot, just about a page.
"After learning about Ohio Northern University and its pharmacy program, I am applying to be a part of its community because I will contribute in terms of academics, personality and diversity to the school population. Academics don't come naturally to me, but I care very deeply about my education and work diligently for my grades and achievements. I have a genuine interest in learning everything in my classes, and there is rarely a night when I am not engaged in studying from the time I come home to the time I go to sleep. The study skills I can bring to Ohio Northern are valuable tools that will not only take me through college but also throughout my professional life in the constantly changing field of pharmacy. As a high school student, I have taken a wide variety of courses, challenging myself in many areas. During my freshman year, taking all of the advanced classes offered, I improved my time management as well as explored what classes I wanted to put my focus into. I considered taking all advanced classes throughout my high school career, but I then decided to focus more on the subjects that I would specialize in for my desired career path: math and science. Throughout all of this, my GPA has been maintained at approximately a 3.75. As a trombonist, I intend to join the Ohio Northern Marching Band, and other organizations and clubs, which will enrich the school community. In a female-dominated profession, as a male, I will contribute to the diversity of the pharmacy program at your school. I come from a hard-working family with a Christian background and Christian values, and a close religious relationship with my friends has helped me grow close to the Lord. Learning about religion with and through my friends has helped me to build a strong relationship with God, more so than if I had only learned about Him through going to church."
I know I need a conclusion, but I'm terrible at those.... Also, what else can I put for diversity? Is there anything else I can add/change to really make this essay stand out?
Thanks!
The prompt is "Based on what you have learned about ONU, why have you chosen to apply? What do you believe you will contribute to the ONU community academically, personally, and/or in terms of diversity?
They gave me 5 lines, so they don't want a whole lot, just about a page.
"After learning about Ohio Northern University and its pharmacy program, I am applying to be a part of its community because I will contribute in terms of academics, personality and diversity to the school population. Academics don't come naturally to me, but I care very deeply about my education and work diligently for my grades and achievements. I have a genuine interest in learning everything in my classes, and there is rarely a night when I am not engaged in studying from the time I come home to the time I go to sleep. The study skills I can bring to Ohio Northern are valuable tools that will not only take me through college but also throughout my professional life in the constantly changing field of pharmacy. As a high school student, I have taken a wide variety of courses, challenging myself in many areas. During my freshman year, taking all of the advanced classes offered, I improved my time management as well as explored what classes I wanted to put my focus into. I considered taking all advanced classes throughout my high school career, but I then decided to focus more on the subjects that I would specialize in for my desired career path: math and science. Throughout all of this, my GPA has been maintained at approximately a 3.75. As a trombonist, I intend to join the Ohio Northern Marching Band, and other organizations and clubs, which will enrich the school community. In a female-dominated profession, as a male, I will contribute to the diversity of the pharmacy program at your school. I come from a hard-working family with a Christian background and Christian values, and a close religious relationship with my friends has helped me grow close to the Lord. Learning about religion with and through my friends has helped me to build a strong relationship with God, more so than if I had only learned about Him through going to church."
I know I need a conclusion, but I'm terrible at those.... Also, what else can I put for diversity? Is there anything else I can add/change to really make this essay stand out?
Thanks!